Wednesday, September 3, 2008

Nathan and the wave

editing is in red.
this is the story I edited...

As the huge wave got closer to the tiny boat, Nathan walked to the [front] bow of the boat. He watched the humugous wave as it got closer. It seemed to get much bigger as it got closer. He thought of the people and family he would never ever see again. He was so sure he could hear the roar of a lion just before he was thrown right off his feet.




by Brodie
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