As the strong wave came closer to the boat,Nathan realised that there was absolutely nothing he could do.
He jogged to the front of the dangerous front of the boat.He watched as the great wave came closer.
It seemed to be getting greater and nearer.He thought of the special people that he would never see again.
He was sure he could hear the roar or a ferice lion just before he was thown off his smelly feet.
by JAYDEN
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3 comments:
i like it how you have color sentences
interesting....
things i liked :
a. it was half funny and half serious
b. it was quite descriptive
thing you could better:
You should check over your work b4 u publish it Because it had a couple of repeats and mistakes
Hayley
P.S. i was gonna use my own account but i kinda forgot my proper user name....
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