Nathan and the wave

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As the huge wave got closer to the tiny boat, Nathan walked to the [front] bow of the boat. He watched the humugous wave as it got closer. It seemed to get much bigger as it got closer. He thought of the people and family he would never ever see again. He was so sure he could hear the roar of a lion just before he was thrown right off his feet.




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tim walked briskly over to the cold and frosty window. He was sure he heard a noise out side. It had not frighted him, but it made him wonder if something or someone was outside. He saw a tree lightly in the wind. He heard the again to [the] his right and quickly turned his head to find its source.thats when it happened the event that would change his life [forever] to the end.

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