Remember:

One thing I remember is both USA batten teams male and female dropped the batten on the last batten change.

revise:

one thing I learnt was that handball is in the Olympics

reveal

I learnt that any little thing counts because the Everswidale twins won by 2 milliseconds!!!

react

in future i will not say that anything is a fluke only if pod10 beats pod9

Cheyenne's 4 RRRR

Remeber:I remeber Mahe Drydale won BRONZE 

Revise:Anything is possible like Valrie Vili won GOLD

Reveal:Anything is possible, Valrie Vili won GOLD after training hard and working for GOLD

React:In the furture I will work hard

Hayleys 4 RRRRs

Remember.

Three things i remember is:

1. Sam Waraners rating is Elite.

2. Micheal Phelps won 8 Gold medals.

3. The weightlifter that dislocated his elbow.

Revise.

Three thing i learnt was:

1. That all of the horse riding activities equestrian.

2. They put a 14 year old gymnast in a comp you have to be 16 to compete in!

3. The chinese and americans won as many medal at the beijing 08 games as we've won since the start of the modern olympic games!

Reveal

This was important to me because:

Micheal Phelps won 8 gold medals. He would of worked really hard and apparently would of eaten a lot of pasta!

React

In the future i will:

i wont give up and keep trying when i get things wrong. The only thing i wont do is eat the that much pasta!

the 4'rs about the olympics

REMEMBER

1.One thing I remember is Mahi Drsydale won bronze in rowing.

REVISE

1.One thing that I learnt was Valire Vile winning gold by persisting

REVEAL

1.Mahi Drsydale didn't quit even though he was sick.

REACT

1.To always persist and keep going and nothings impossible

by jessica

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jayden here just seeing what we are up to.

jayden h

the chapter story

As the wave rushed closer to the boat, nathan realised that there was nothing he could do. He walked to the front of the boat. he watched the wave as it sped closer. It seemed to be getting even bigger as it rushed closer. He thought of the people that he would never see again. He was positive that he could hear the loud roar of a lion just before he was thrown of his feet. A sea monster!

Jessica's draft writing

As the enormous roaring wave got closer to the creaking boat, Nathan realised that there was nothing he really could do. He walked slowly to the front of the white boat. He stared at the wave as it got closer. It seemed to be getting bigger. He thought of the other people on the gleaming boat that he would never see again in his life. He was sure he could he a roar of a lion just before he was thrown right off his shaking feet.

THE MAGER TSUNAMI.

Today we did an exciting recrafting sesion here is what we wrote.

As the strong wave came closer to the boat,Nathan realised that there was absolutely nothing he could do.

He jogged to the front of the dangerous front of the boat.He watched as the great wave came closer.

It seemed to be getting greater and nearer.He thought of the special people that he would never see again.

He was sure he could hear the roar or a ferice lion just before he was thown off his smelly feet.

by JAYDEN 

Nathan and the wave

editing is in red.
this is the story I edited...

As the huge wave got closer to the tiny boat, Nathan walked to the [front] bow of the boat. He watched the humugous wave as it got closer. It seemed to get much bigger as it got closer. He thought of the people and family he would never ever see again. He was so sure he could hear the roar of a lion just before he was thrown right off his feet.




by Brodie

Caitlin's last editing practise

As the biggest wave got closer to the tiny boat, Nathan realised that there was nothinghe could do at the last minute. He quietly tiptoed to the hull of the small boat. He saw the the lasing wave coming for them. It seemed to be getting bigger and bigger as  got closer . Nathan thought of the best people that he couldn't ever see again. He was positivly sure he could hear the amazing roar of the lion just before he was chucked off his feet.  

tim walked over to the window.he was sure he heard a noise.it had not frightend him but it made him wonder if somthing was outside.he saw a tree to the left swayingin the wind.he heard the noies again to the right and qwickly turned his headto find its source.thats when it happend the event that would change his life forever?

Writing......

Today we did some editing inserting and replacing. Heres the one i made.

 Tim hurried towards the closed window . He was sure he heard a smallish noise . It had not frightened or scared him , but made him curious to if something was outside . He saw  tree on the far left swaying in the strong wind. He heard the noise , louder now , to the near right and quickly jerked his head to find its place. Thats when it happened the event that would change his life dramatically , Forever!

By Me a.k.a Hayley.  

story on Tim

red is were I edited.

this is the story I edited...

                                                                                            

tim walked briskly over to the cold and frosty window. He was sure he heard a noise out side. It had not frighted him, but it made him wonder if something or someone was outside. He saw a tree lightly in the wind. He heard the again to [the] his right and quickly turned his head to find its source.thats when it happened the event that would change his life [forever] to the end.

by brodie

TIM

Tim gassed over to the large window. He was sure he heard a noise. It had not frightened him , but it made him wonder if something was outside.He saw a tree to the left swaying in the strong wind. He heard the noise again to the right and quickly turned his head to find it's source. That's when it happened,the happened the horrible event that would change his life forever.

by JAYD JAYDEN OWW YEAHHH

Caitlin's edit pracitse

Tim shakly walked over to the huge window.He was sure he heard a bang of a nosie.It had not scared him but it made him think if something was outside.He saw a spooky tree to the left not caring about swaying in the wind.He heard the scary nosie again to the right and quickly turned his shaky head to see it's source. That's when it happened ,that very event that would spook his life forever and ever and ever.